British Comedy Guide

Dan Sweryt - Script Editing

Dan Sweryt

I can perform all manner of services for your scripts.  From informed notes, to punch ups to just someone to proof read it so it doesn't look unprofessional to those receiving your script.

Do you need some script notes or critique for a sitcom?  Then I'm happy to give your script a thorough going-over!  It'll most likely be quite harsh, but once you've gotten over the initial shock/hatred and read it again, you'll realise I've probably made a few valid points.

I've had moderate achievements with my own writing in The Sitcom Trials and The Sitcom Mission but have additionally script edited two entries to success; Vince Stadon's Checkpoint Dave, winner of The Sitcom Trials 2011 and Neil Tollfree's Alice & The Genie, the winner of The Sci-Fi Sitcom Trials 2012.

Story Editing/Outline Analysis

Review and advice of your outline before you commit to writing the script

It's becoming clear that what may be more useful for some writers is someone to give a view on their episode outline before they commit to writing the script.

Well, I can be that person you need!

You'll receive a page of notes on your episode idea so you are well-prepared to take that all-important leap into writing the actual script!

Script notes, script edit, punch-up or proofread of your 15-minute sitcom scripts (ie Sitcom Mission, Trials, short sitcom length)

Script notes, a script edit, a punch-up or just a proofread of your 15-minute sitcom scripts so they're in the best shape for your next draft and/or submission somewhere

We all need an affordable script notes service, don't we?

Well, that's what I'm trying to provide.  A service that doesn't break the bank, yet still pays me enough to make it worth doing!

I can provide script notes, a script edit, a punch-up or just a proofread of your 15-minute sitcom scripts so they're in the best shape for a short sitcom type contest (ie Sitcom Mission, Sitcom Trials, First 10 pages-type thing, etc)

What you'll get is a report on your sitcom and a pdf of your script with notes scrawled all over it in orange (or any colour of your choice) to highlight where things can be improved.

Script notes, script edit, punch-up or proofread of your 30-minute sitcom scripts

Script notes, a script edit, a punch-up or just a proofread of your 20-30 minute sitcom scripts so they're in the best shape for your next draft and/or submission somewhere

We all need an affordable script notes service, don't we?

Well, that's what I'm trying to provide.  A service that doesn't break the bank, yet still pays me enough to make it worth doing!

I can provide script notes, a script edit, a punch-up or just a proofread of your 30-minute sitcom scripts so they're in the best shape for a submitting to a production company, a producer or some form of contest.

What you'll get is a report on your sitcom and a pdf of your script with notes scrawled all over it in orange (or any colour of your choice!) to highlight where things can be improved.

Testimonials

"I had what I thought was a pretty good idea for a sitcom, but my first draft wasn't working, and I didn't know why.  I sweated over it, wondering where the problem was, walking the streets, worrying. Sitcom scripts, like babies, keep screaming and crying, and you try this and you try that, to no avail.  And then the mother comes in with a  sort of smile/scowl, and makes it all okay.  It was a bit like that for me when Dan took a look at Checkpoint Dave and changed the nappy.  And then wiped up the drool, and suggested very sensible little changes that stopped me walking the streets, worrying. A bit later, draft 2 sorted, happy smiles all round, Dan emailed out of the blue with another suggestion that had been worrying at *him*.  Stone cold brilliant, and I hated him for seeing it when I hadn't, and of course I always claim it was my idea all along.

"I produce the Bristol Sitcom Trials now, and change other babies' nappies myself, but when I'm stuck and the screaming and crying won't go away, I know the email address of the man who'll stop me walking the streets, worrying."

Vince Stadon, producer of Sitcom Trials and winner of The Sitcom Trials 2011 with Checkpoint Dave (which has since had its own theatre run in both Manchester and Bristol.)


"My script, Alice and the Genie, won the Sitcom Trials. Without Dan's script editing it wouldn't have come close."

Neil Tollfree, winner of The Sci-Fi Sitcom Trials 2012.

"I've used Dan's script-editing services for several comedy scripts and his notes were always honest, insightful and useful in making the scripts stronger and funnier." 

Jim Speirs, commissioned BBC writer.


"The most useful feedback I have EVER received.  So impressed by your suggestions and your understanding of the characters."  

Jane McCutcheon, writer, Have I Got News For You, Horrible Histories and Dead Ringers and successful in The Sitcom Trials and the Sitcom Geeks contest 2019.


"A lot of useful stuff in there, thanks again Dan. Money well spent."

Steve Rose, commissioned by an independent production company to write a sitcom script.


“Dan’s sitcom editing service had been on my bookmarks for at least a year. I’d held off due to general procrastination, fear of being told I was sh*t and blah blah blah.  I wish I’d pulled the trigger sooner. 

"His critique notes are thorough, focussed, fair and encouraging. My writing has more purpose now and I have a clearer path on how to create comedy from the characters.  Don’t hesitate like I did.”

Peter Harris, comedy writer

 

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