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INT. DAY. BEDROOM.

A MAN IS SURFING THE WEB WHEN…

SFX BANG. ARMED POLICE STORM INTO THE ROOM.

POLICEMAN:
Put your hands where I can see them.

MAN:
What the f**k! What's going on.

POLICEMAN:
Thread hijacking and that's just for starters, multiple accounts, trolling and you resurrected a dead thread.

MAN:
But, but.

POLICEMAN:
But my arse. Cuff him.

MAN:
I, I need to go to the blog, I mean bog.

POLICEMAN:
Downloading too are we?

SFX PHONE BLEEP.

POLICEMAN:
Someone open his text. What does it say?

VOICE:
It says ROFL followed by an emoticon.

POLICEMAN:
The roflemoti con, first heard of in Sicily, no less. You've fell in with a bad crowd sunshine. Its mafia, we'll need to call in the big boys.

MAN:
There must be some mistake.

POLICEMAN:
No mistake. Ever been to jail?

MAN:
(sobbing) No, no I haven't.

POLICEMAN:
Neither have I funny enough, then again I'm a cop not a screw. Like screwing do you? Heh, heh.

THE MAN COLLAPSES.

POLICEMAN:
Computer virus, ah well, lets lift him. F**king hell, he's a bulky male isn't he.

Genius have you seen the Recorded for Training Purposes thread?

I think that could win.

Hi Nige

Concept is excellent. Needs a tightening/rewrite before you submit anywhere.

Dan

I agree. Lovely concept but could do with tightening up. Certainly seems to fall within the brief for RFTP.

Rarely disappointed with your sketches, and this is another I really liked. If you feel it needs polishing, definitely worth the time.

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