Pinkneck

EXT. TREELINED WOODS - NIGHT

P.O.V. someone running through woods and shot in The Blair Witch Project or Terminator style, where you see things as if you are looking through the runner's eyes

INT. SALOON BAR - NIGHT

Cuts to a honky-tonk/redneck bar in the deep south of America with sawdust on the floor and bluegrass/ho-down music playing.

From then on, things keep cutting between the two scenes so you have the runner fighting his way through the trees and then back to a busty waitress bringing beers over to redneck customers sat at a table.

Finally the runner bursts into the bar and the music stops and everyone goes silent until after a pregnant pause, one elderly redneck customer asks.

ELDERLY REDNECK
You ain't from round these 'ere parts, are you boy?

Final shot of camp dressed runner wearing tight PVC shorts, buckles and chains and a leather cap, as if become detached from Gay Pride marching parade.

FADE OUT

For me personally it's not upto your usual standards. Sorry Ima.

That's OK Scott as I suppose some hit and some miss but I was thinking of it as being filmed in the Terminator or some kind of killing machine P.O.V. and have it jump back and forth between that and what was going on in the redneck bar.

Then when you finally see the "Killing machine" I had visions of Julian Clary dressed how he used to when he was called the Joan Collins Fanclub.

Again I think it would probably work better visually than it looks in print.....well hopefully anyway.

i was expecting him to run in dressed like some gay pride fanatic, to be looked at by the cowboys and say something about brokeback mountain, but i liked this version, not your best, but it was still good.
well done

I liked it a lot Ima. Made me larf out loud.