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Yeah, the script looks good. I've seen most of those sketches here in Critque.
Are there only going to be 12 sketches or is that just the beginning?
I'd call it..
"Grossed out chav-spastic"
assuming it was dark
It's actually not dark. It's his more normal sketches.
Well I'm more looking for feedback on how accessable, and I hope, professional it looks.
I'm conciously trying to show it could work as a mildly dark prewatershed treat.
Sort of like Crackerjack by David Cronenberg.
The other 2 titles I was kicking around were.
"Dumbing up", and "In the Dog"
His more normal sketches, oh dear.
I'm a nice person with a some times not so nice sense of humour.
His more normal sketches, oh dear.
Heh, I meant ones that have no debauchery, bestiality and other shocks. 
The other 2 titles I was kicking around were.
"Dumbing up", and "In the Dog"
Acually, I quite like In The Dog.
Has different meanings, i.e.
Could mean:
Dinner in the dog.
Shagging the dog, etc
Well I'm more looking for feedback on how accessable, and I hope, professional it looks.
OK, had a better look. I was a bit tired the other night.
The material is great. No faults there.
The formatting looks ok, but I feel each sketch needs separating a bit more.
You know, with a Sketch Title, etc, or maybe have a new sketch begin on a new page.
At the moment, the text of each sketch just seems to just blend into the next.
Some script readers may think they're still reading the same sketch, u know, the readers who have been reading badly formatted shite all day that some idiot has sent in (I'm sure they get lots of that!), and can no longer see your script for looking.
I'm sure I read somewhere that a series of sketches should contain Sketch Title and your contact details on every page, and that each sketch starts on it's own page.
Quote: Mikey J @ September 23 2008, 1:44 PM BSTI'm sure I read somewhere that a series of sketches should contain Sketch Title and your contact details on every page, and that each sketch starts on it's own page.
Yep. Mikey's hit the nail on the head there. That's how I always do it.
I'll have a look if you still want participants.
my email is: deferenzuk@yahoo.co.uk
Def.
How about 'Satire Shatire' as a title? 
or 'Dam and Blast Furnace'
I thought it looked quite presentable (but I'm no expert). Just be sure to do a few edits re. grammar and spelling. Also make sure you have as many different sketches in there as you can, i.e. ensure you've got a range of settings, characters and jokes all based around really original ideas. It seems good, but with your output, you've probably covered even more divergent situations somewhere along the line.
The Great Space Toaster!
Thanks for all your advice guys, expect to see finished pilot script in a day or two.
I will title individual sketches, but I do want to keep existing sketches I like they're quite similar.
n.b. In the dog, as in "You can't put the shit back in the dog,"
But Great Space Toaster my favorite.
Final version (hopefully) of In the Dog is done, any one fancy a peak?
Also would love some feedback on Sound and Vision my silent sketch show pilot.
Please help, every little helps us aspiring writers.
I'll have a look. Send me everything you got.
w.lewis@rocketmail.com
In the Dog has just gone to screen play productions, wish me luck!
Thanks for all your help.