Olympics Drug Song

It's a bit melancholy, but I kinda like it. Any feedback would be appreciated

TO THE TUNE OF "THE DRUGS DON'T WORK" BY "THE VERVE"
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CHANGED:
All this talk of winning gold
It's getting me down my love
Have to carry the flag, all on my own
Don't want to let them down

And I know you're thinking of me
And I know you're on my side
But the drugs do work
And I think it's worth
Taking them to win a race again

Now the drugs do work
And I think it's worth
Injecting them to win in Beijing

But I know I'm losing my physique
And I'm not quite at my peak
And if I wanna show, then I really know
I've got to use amphetamines

Now the drugs do work
And I think it's worth
Injecting them to win in Beijing

But baby, ooh, if I get caught, I'm really screwed
Just like you said, for all my life, I'll be called "dopehead"

All this talk of winning gold
It's getting me down my love
Have to carry the flag, all on my own
Don't want to let them down

Now the drugs do work
And I think it's worth
Injecting them to win in Beijing

But baby, ooh, if I get caught, I'm really screwed
Just like you said, it will be on, a back-page spread

I could do with EPO, just let me know
If you see my dealer again

Now the drugs do work
And I think it's worth
Injecting them to win in Beijing

Yeah, I know I'll need them in Beijing
Yeah, I know I'll need them in Beijing
Yeah, I know I'll need them in Beijing
Yeah, I know I'll need them in Beijing

FADE OUT

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ORIGINAL: http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=n4XCGeckA-E

All this talk of getting old
It's getting me down my love
Like a cat in a bag, waiting to drown
This time I'm comin' down

And I hope you're thinking of me
As you lay down on your side
Now the drugs don't work
They just make you worse
But I know I'll see your face again

Now the drugs don't work
They just make you worse
But I know I'll see your face again

But I know I'm on a losing streak
'Cause I passed down my old street
And if you wanna show, then just let me know
And I'll sing in your ear again

Now the drugs don't work
They just make you worse
But I know I'll see your face again

'Cause baby, ooh, if heaven calls, I'm coming, too
Just like you said, you leave my life, I'm better off dead

All this talk of getting old
It's getting me down my love
Like a cat in a bag, waiting to drown
This time I'm comin' down

Now the drugs don't work
They just make you worse
But I know I'll see your face again

'Cause baby, ooh, if heaven calls, I'm coming, too
Just like you said, you leave my life, I'm better off dead

But if you wanna show, just let me know
And I'll sing in your ear again

Now the drugs don't work
They just make you worse
But I know I'll see your face again

Yeah, I know I'll see your face again
Yeah, I know I'll see your face again
Yeah, I know I'll see your face again
Yeah, I know I'll see your face again

I'm never going down, I'm never coming down
No more, no more, no more, no more, no more
I'm never coming down, I'm never going down
No more, no more, no more, no more, no more
(Repeat and Fade Out)

You need to look at you're syllable count e.g:

"But I know I'll see your face again" - has 9 syllables, whereas your replacement line of "Taking them to win in Beijing" has 8 syllables. It ruins the flow of the song and thus takes away the similarity.

It's a good song to lampoon for the Olympics, but I don't know if there's been much controversy re: drug taking so far.

You also need to get some gags in on the subject. At the minute, it just seems as though you've got a few drugs references in. You need to relate some gags to other olympic news or any other current news.

Oops, thanks for the spot.

I think there's been some catching of cheats.

I'll try and work in some more topical lines, found it a bit difficult as it's quite a sad melody.

No worries.

Getting topical lines into a song is very difficult. You need to find a rhyming dictionary to help. I think there's one online called rhymezone which is pretty good.