I'd like to report a robbery (sketch)

Ok, I've been lurking about here for a bit. Finally decided to get involved. Been trying to get my creative synapses firing again.

This is the first thing I've written in a while. I'd appreciate your comments.

THEFT

A Police station.
A very bored looking Police Officer yawns, idly flicking through a copy of "Policeman Monthly" magazine. The phone rings.

Officer
Hello, yes can I help?

Voice
Yes, I'd like to report a robbery please.

Officer
Oh right, I'll just take down your details.

Policeman gets out his notepad and pen

Officer
Can I just take your name?

Voice
Yes, it's Edward. Edward Bear.

Officer (starting to write)
Could you spell that for me?

Voice
Yeah, sure that's Edward E-D-W-A-R-D. Bear B-E-A-R.

Officer (dryly)
Edward Bear?

Voice
Yes, Edward Bear. Or Teddy. My friends call me Teddy.

Officer
Okay…Teddy Bear. Would you like to tell me what happened, Mr Bear?

Voice
Yeah, me and my friend were rambling this afternoon – down near the nature forest.

Officer (continuing to write)
Right.

Voice
Yeah, well we stopped for a minute to take some pictures and when I went to put it back in my rucksack some kid ran past and stole my camera.

Officer
Stole your camera?

Voice
Yeah, right out of my hand. It was one of them new digital ones. 7 megapixels, digital zoom, image stabilizer the lot. All my photographs were on there. My son's christening, our holiday to Cyprus…

Officer
So, Mr Bear. I suppose you could say you'd had your "Pics nicked".

Voice (confused)
Well, that's one way of putting it I suppose.

Officer
And, you could say you were in the woods, not a forest.

Voice
Well, yeah. Forest, woods. It's all the same.

Officer (reading back from his notepad)
Okay, let me make sure I've got this right. Your name is Teddy Bear, and you and your friend went down to the woods today, where you had your pics nicked?

Voice
That's right.

Officer
I bet that was a shock.

Voice
Well, it was a big surprise.

Officer
Right, that's it. Look, you can go to prison for wasting police time you know!

Voice
But I've been robbed!

Officer
Don't try this again or we'll trace the call!

Voice
Wait, you didn't event ask me what he looked like!

Officer puts down the phone.

Cut to: A giant Teddy Bear wearing a large woolly rucksack holding an oversized woolly mobile phone. He is stood next to a giant Rocking horse wearing a bobble hat and hiking boots.

Teddy Bear
He's cut me off!

Rocking Horse
Bastard.

Very nice especially the visual punchline.

Nicley paced as well.

haahahaha

At first, I thought it was going to be an obvious punchline, but I LOVED the Teddy Bear and Rcking Horse bit at the end, especially the oversized woolly mobile phone.

Great detail, from Policeman Monthly to the woolly phone.

Nice sketch.. I did see the ending coming (not that it matters!)

Never saw the woolly phone though! Nice touch!

I actually buy Policeman Monthly ....
....just for the centrefold!

Only joking! No, really, I am!

Thanks for the comments.

I was worried that the ending might be telegraphed so I went for the extra visual punch at the end, and took it over the top with the Rocking Horse in hiking boots and bobble hat.

I think you get away with it because of the great visual stuff at the end. Some of the earlier dialogue seemed a bit slow and stilted to me, and I'd definitely trim it. But the ending was great, no doubt.