Sketch 9 was a bit rubbish. Great, will keep those two and update or discard the others as suggested.
Graham, you don't need to be intimidated by genius, it won't hurt you. Come closer, come on. A little closer. There we go, isn't that better?
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I feel sullied. And at the same time exhilarated.
Number 7 is a real cracker, definitely the pick of the lot! Totally unexpected ending and very funny.
These are all good, very imaginative, though occasionally (as in the sketch with the archaeological dig) the disalogue is a little clunky. I also agree with most of SootyJ's suggestions.
Overall, good enough to make me feel jealous. Well done.
I thought this was an extremely funny, original, off-the-wall-comedy. Just a few reservations:
EP1 SKETCH 8. Linkin Park was good play on words, then it got a bit silly with ‘inside Cliff Richard', etc., I thought you might have continued the play on words, with something like, ' then we came upon an Oasis', or 'we went for a swim in Justin Timberlake' etc.
EP1: SKETCH 11. A bit laboured (no pun intended). Great idea. Expected it to end on something like,
Hi Jerry, me again. I couldn't help but notice that .44 Magnum you're pointing at me....
EP1: SKETCH 12. The 'foreign' waitress/waiter/lover who ends up speaking fluent English has been done many times.
Being the Devil's Advocate, I think that mocking 'Jesus' might put some people off! Also, bores would make the usual, predictable comparisons with ‘Life of Brian' and/or 'Jesus' in 'South Park'.
So, bearing in mind that Ben Kingsley played both the totally over-the-top gangster in the movie 'Sexy Beast' and Gandhi in the movie 'Gandhi'- how about a 'Beasty Gandhi 2000'? I.E. 'Gandhi' schizophrenically alternating between his gentle pacifist self and the over-the-top gangster in 'Sexy Beast'? Just a thought!
Seemed a bit broad to me – gay bombs and wanking references seem a bit too childish. Saying that, I like the idea of a woman who refers to the size of anything in terms of testicles.
A lot of repetition takes place in the sketches. It would be better if you got to the point and then got out. Also, you need to avoid exposition. It ruins the natural flow of things.
A few people have said that the dialogue is clunky. It is, but that's quite easy to sort out.
Simon,
That was hilarious. The Evil Jesus stuff has had me laughing all day. And the "I don't get it" sketch is so brilliant I'm considering stealing it.
Ha ha, thanks Jon. I'd rather you didn't steal it to be honest. 
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"I hereby donate ‘I don't get it' sketch within ‘Evil Jesus in the Eighties ' to Morrace, and relinquish any rights I may have in it."
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Sign and return please.
This looks really interesting but I guess it's been deleted now! Any chance of a PM?
Quote: Simon Stratton @ July 28 2008, 11:40 AM BSTHa ha, thanks Jon. I'd rather you didn't steal it to be honest.
Aw dude.
I was only joking about the stealing part. I suppose the biggest compliment I can make is that its kicked me into writing my own sketches again.
Keep up the good work.
