British Comedy Guide

Three blokes in a transit. Page 2

What I liked about it was that it wasn't too laboured. The flow was constant and there were some good lines like:

MIKE:
How is he anyway?

JOHN:
Being sick. Well, not really being sick. It's like he's leaking from the mouth.

MIKE:
I'm pulling over.

JOHN:
You suddenly care?

MIKE:
No, I'm hungry. There's a burger bar up there.

The only thing I would say is that although I immediately took to the characters, they all seemed too similar. When you go back to this (as I really hope you will), try and flesh them out and that way it should become even funnier. Well done though.

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