Big Bob

DAVINA McCALL IS PRESENTING BIG BROTHER.

DAVINA

Hello viewers wahey! I'm Davina McCall, way ! I've just had my valium enema. So I can pretend I don't care I've spent the last 9 years as; a zoo keeper to assorted human rejects from Monkey World.

But this Big Brother is coming to an end. With a surprise winner. After all the other contestants =mysteriously beat them selves to death. And that fat one who looks like a Pokemon, was found baked in a giant cookies.

The winner is Robert Mugabe.

ROBERT MUGABE WALKS ON

Hello UK homosexual, gangsters. Ha ha! Now not only am I president for life of Zimbabwe, but I am your most beloved Z list celeb.

DAVINA

Only till the next Big Brother.

ROBERT SHOOTS HER

ROBERT

No I declare myself Big Brother winner for life, only God can remove me. There will be no more Big Brother ever.

CHEERS.

DAVINA

Looks like you finally did something popular Bob.

Ha! Pokemon in cookies.

I enjoy topical sketches, and therefore look forward to reading your submissions to critique.

Whilst I understand (I think) your wish to bring two topical stories together in a skit, very often they come across as two ideas brought together kicking and screaming on the same page, rather than a marriage of two topical events resulting in a great sketch.

A question: If your writing is mainly topical, does it not make sense for the conversation/setting to be fairly logical, if not probable?

I have always thought (rightly or wrongly) that topical sketch writing needs to be slicker and dare I say it better written, than weird or dark humour that can generate it's comedy voice more from the character or setting.

Think of the typical audience that any skit is targetted at, the average viewer from Bremner, Bird and Fortune is going to differ from The Mighty Boosh isn't it?

I await the deluge of abuse from more informed and successful writers in this forum

Hmm so you didn't like it much? Fair play, I find topical skits for the stage is alot closer to writing standup. e.g. big ideas, and a few strong lines that realy stand out. Also combining stories is quite a common tactic, in this case two stories about votes.

Personally i thought it was interesting to look at Mugabe from the point of view, supposing he tried to throw a different vote?

I do agree that when two stories are combined the result can be a great sketch, just dont think you managed to pull it off on this occasion.

After reading it again, my only suggestion would be to keep the Mugabe reference as a reaveal at the end of the sketch. If you introduce the two themes too early your audience starts working on their own for their own link and punchline, at least I always do

Where has this nutty idea slipped in that satire, needs to be subtle?

without wishing to "gang up" the above posts are right - i've said it before but your obvious hatred of the things you target stands out far more than the comedy (i dont get the comedy either as i (like those above) want my satire a little more slick and little less panto) but that may just be me)

Well the schools of satire are more

crude, Spitting Image, Ben Elton, News Revue,

subtle, Rory Bremner, HIGNFY

Only one of the above is open to unsolicited material. So I write for them, I do subtle some times. But thats more practice self indulgent.

Dis the skit, not the genre.

although only 2 of teh above are on TV nowadays!

but even spitting image never seemed to have the real nasty edge you adopt - i know a few people have said they found their puppets quite funny...not sure that davina would thank you for your take on her though!

have a go at robert for sure, but it feels like you hate davina, BB and bob all as much as each other and (for me) it smothers the comedy.

Not my sort of skit, I guess we have differing senses of humour.

I like puns, but not elongated skits about a pun.