Phone Sex

INT. HOTEL ROOM

GEOFF IS ON THE PHONE TO HIS GIRLFRIEND (SUE). THE SCENE CUTS BACK AND FORTH BETWEEN THE TWO AS THEY TALK.

GEOFF
Hey listen. I miss you loads, but I'll be back on Sunday.

SUE
But I can't wait, I want you now!

GEOFF
Me too sweetie.

SUE
I just had a naughty idea, we could have phone sex.

GEOFF
Are you sure? One of us might get hearing aids.

SUE
Stop messing around, it'll be fun.

GEOFF
Okay.

SUE
Right well I'm touching myself, how does that make you feel?

GEOFF
Oh that's hot baby.

SUE
What do you want me to do next?

GEOFF
GOOOOOOOOAL! Go on my son! There's only one Frank Lampard! Get in! I'm sorry love, what were you saying? Sue? Sue?

Bit muddled, but I can see where it's going.

Play up inappropriate repsonses from football more in my view.

'hearing aids'

Class.

Hearing aids is a good one, but it doesn't belong in this sketch. This plays like a 'slice of life' kind of thing and normal people don't come up with gags like that on the fly. Save it for something else. And write it 'hearing AIDS'.

be funnier if he yells out "stick it in there" or other Neanderthal football terms mid telef**k.

Lmao. That ending works really well. I take my hat off to your good sir

Arf! Nice rewrite.