British Comedy Guide

Retirement Home

INT. A retirement home - day

A young couple arrive and sit down on a couch. There are two men, both identical and wearing the same clothes.

YOUNG MAN
This is my grandad Jack, and this is his brother Mark. Mark is blind

YOUNG WOMAN
How did that happen, if you don't mind me asking.

MARK
Darts accident. Never saw it comming.

A mobile phone starts ringing. The young woman starts to look through her bag.

YOUNG WOMAN
Damn it, I can never find anything in this bloody bag.

The young man starts looking in the bag to. The phone stops ringing.

YOUNG MAN
Ah well. If it was important I'm sure they'll phone back.

They look up. One of the twins has gone and the other is sat in a chair next to the couch.

YOUNG MAN
(Quietly)
You know what would be really fun

He whispers something in the young woman's ear

YOUNG WOMAN
(Quietly)
Do you think we could get away with it?

YOUNG MAN
(Quietly)
Yeah, that's only Mark there. As long as we're quiet he won't know a thing

YOUNG WOMAN
(Quietly)
You sure it's him?

YOUNG MAN
(Quietly)
Of course. I know who is and who isn't my own grandad

The young man kisses the young woman. They then start to "make out". This goes on for a few moments and as the young woman starts to lift off the young man's shirt she giggles a little.

MARK
What's going on?

There is a loud "shush". The camera spins round to see the rest of the residents of the retirement home watching the young couple.

Can't see it as a sketch, but maybe a joke in a film or sitcom? It's an OK joke, but nothing that's not been done before.

Just a teeny formatting point. You should mention all truly significant casting characteristics of characters the FIRST time they are mentioned, so it should say TWIN in that first paragraph.

There are two men (twins) ...

Then make it doubly obvious to the audience in case the casting team are NBG.

This is my grandad Jack, and this is his twin brother Mark. Mark is blind

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