PRODUCER ON MOBILE, WHILST MAN AND WOMAN ACT OUT ADVERTS
PRODUCER
These new live channel 4 adverts aren't really working.
MAN
This new Stinks deoderant will deffo get me a fit bird.
SPRAYS HIMSELF.
WOMAN
Walks on what is that stink?
Live adverts.
I was left absolutely stupefied by that. What was that about? Didn't get it at all.
Channel 4 are filming live adverts, I was wandering how a live advert could go wrong.
Quote: sootyj @ May 31 2008, 9:57 AM BSTChannel 4 are filming live adverts, I was wandering how a live advert could go wrong.
Still not sure I get it. What's this line about?
WOMAN
Walks on what is that stink?
I think the walks on should be a stage direction.
Quote: Marc P @ May 31 2008, 11:23 AM BSTI think the walks on should be a stage direction.
Oh, I see. Not to sound cruel, but I still don't see the joke. The deodorant is called Stinko. It stinks. Am I missing something?
I guess the woman that walks on or by is just a member of the public reacting unscripted to the aroma. Althought your point about the name of the deodourant is well made. I am reminded of a film - something party NFS short made larger with the yes no man from the vicar of dibley's son - where the Man wears 'Stallion' aftershave and everyone comments about a smell of horse piss. Maybe something along those lines would be more aposite.
David if you're gonna critique you've gotta read a little more closely.
It's called stinks not stinko, hence rhymes with lynx which stinks.
Though fairplay the walks on bit was a misplaced stage direction
Naughty Sootyj
Also lost the lost stage direction, which is her throwing up.
Quote: sootyj @ May 31 2008, 8:21 PM BSTDavid if you're gonna critique you've gotta read a little more closely.
Could also say, Sooty if you're gonna put things up for critique, write them bloody down properly. 