Gladiators Page 2

I like this and think it's fine as is.

I enjoyed this and didn't think it too long. What matters is that it's consistently funny, and you peppered in enough jokes to make sure that was the case. One minor niggle: this line...

SPURIUS

I said, he's gutted. He hasn't got any entrails left.

I liked the gag, but logically if he didn't have any entrails left he'd already be dead, which pre-empts your punchline. You could maybe go for something like this instead...

SPURIUS

I said, he's gutted. He's holding his intestines in with his hands.

Just a thought...

I like it and I don't think it needs David's little change.

You KNOW he's dead, that's what makes the reporters questions & the responses funny.

And I don't think it too long.

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Gawd help us if EVERYONE's span of attention is only 3 seconds nowadays; where will we find our next generation of airline pilots.