A few weeks ago, I had an idea for a sketch premise involving an old woman trying to cross the road. I had a go at finishing it off today and this is what I came up with. D'you think the build up is too long?
Ext. Street
An old woman stands at the edge of a busy road. She looks hesitant to cross. A young man walks past.
Man: D'you need a hand crossing?
Woman: Yes please.
The man links arms with her and they cross the road. They reach the other side.
Man: Ok?
Woman: Thank you ever so much, young man. You deserve a reward.
The woman pulls out her purse and starts rooting around.
Man: No. No. I don't want paying!
Woman: You really are a good Samaritan aren't-
Man: LOOK OUT!
The man grabs the old woman and pulls her to the side. A bike bell rings as a cyclist flies past. The man looks at the woman who is clinging to him.
Man: Are you ok?
Woman: (SHAKILY) I'm fine.
Man: (PAUSE) D'you think you could let go?
The woman slowly peels herself off the man.
Man: You're sure you're ok?
Woman: Yes. Yes. Don't let me keep you any longer!
Man: Ok. Bye.
Woman: Bye bye! And thanks again.
The man departs. The old woman watches him leave. She then turns round and whistles. The cyclist comes riding over.
Cyclist: Did it work?
The old woman smiles and holds up a man's wallet and watch.
ENDS