Sorry Kim, dark or light I don't find this funny.
Regardless of the dubious subject matter I just can't see any actual humour in it.
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It's a great idea but tonally it's a bit of a mess.
Fireman refusing to save people is great, but it's a bit confused as to why he is refusing to save people.
Is he a rubbish fireman, or is he a PC jobsworth?
The final line is excellent, and I feel with a mere defined middle would be excellent.
yeah I definetly dont feel its my best either, its a bit sketchy (no pun intended). I like the character and the situation enough to work on it though, probably when I put more than 15 minutes in to it!
The idea is that he is just a bit bonkers, but so are the rest of his fire squad and they all go around with a bizarre set of rules.
Hmmm. I like a lot of dark humour and there's something in this but it seems a bit confused. With the groping of the mum and deciding which child is prettiest he comes across as a bit of a slimy perv. Either you didn't mean it to and should remove the implication somehow or you did mean it to and need to make it more obvious.