EXT. DAY. BEACH.
# 'I DO LIKE TO BE BESIDE THE SEASIDE' PLAYS THROUGHOUT #
CAMERA ON KID IN SHORTS AND SUNHAT. HE IS MAKING SANDCASTLES ON TOP OF HIS DAD WHO IS BURIED IN SAND APART FROM HEAD AND FEET.
PULL BACK TO REVEAL THEY ARE IN SANDPIT IN MIDDLE OF BUSY CONSTRUCTION SITE.
ENDS.
You can be negative if you want.
It's nice, but not a hardcore surprise, which you usually need for pull back and reveals.
And we all get ignored a bit from time to time.
Yeah thats true, thanks for taking an interest. You give more feedback than anyone on critique Sooty, i'll say that for you. Ah well, cheers guys. One must keep on keeping on.
That's because I'm an automated critique program, Aaron created me.
It's also only fair, as I write more than any one, probably.
It would work well as one of those real quickie on The League of Gentlemen. You know, as they cut from one main scene to the other. But I don't think it would stand out particularly on its own without some sort of follow-up gag.
Dan
i refuse to critique anything that isn't given a proper title.
imagine if we all did that? It'd be mayhem!