This is very short but is it any good? Any feedback gratefully received!
INT: An off licence. One woman serving behind the counter.
Enter a female customer.
Customer: It's my silver wedding anniversary tomorrow and I want a special wine for my husband for the occssion.
Shop assistant: How about this one (in high pitched whining voice) "Twenty five bloody years and you're still a lazy, useless waste of space."
Customer: Perfect, thankyou. (She exits)
Yes, it's good. Very funny.
Bo.
Its a good premise If it were me I'd shuffle the lines a bit I'd have to woman saying "Twenty five bloody years..etc" just my opinion though and put something on the wine label as a secondary gag. Just an idea matey
Cool. You could get weird with that one as well.
Hahahahaha.
Can i play the shop keeper?
I liked it too
Customer: What year is it?
Shop Assistant: 2007
Customer: What year is it?
Shop Assistant: 2007
Customer: Shit, the Kids! (leaves in a hurry)
SHOPKEEPER
Do I know you from somewhere
CUSTOMER
Well I am off the telly
SHOPKEEPER
Oh thank fook for that. Was hard to see the screen with your legs dangling down.
forum sketch writing! A revolution in comedy sketch writing. It happened here first. Can we include some parsnips?
Customer: What year is it?
Shop Assistant: 2007
Customer: Shit, the Kids! No...It's okay. I just remember I had a hysterectomy several years ago!
Customer: What year is it?
Shop Assistant: 2007
Customer: Shit, the Kids! No...It's okay. I just remember I had a hysterectomy several years ago! ..........But That reminds me, can i have some duck egg blue paint for my daughters womb.
Liked it.