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Quote: Bohannon @ April 19 2008, 10:11 AM BST

I do like your sketches David. They always have a fresh angle and a quirkines about them that would certainly keep me watching if they made it to telly.

As for this sketch I liked the original - I;m not sure if I'm allowed to make a suggestion but I think all I would add is, maybe at the end of the sketch, have Tom sigh before getting up from his chair as if heading off on another long quest for the answer to the new joke?

Nice one,

Bo.

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Thanks, Bo, I appreciate that. I think you're right about extending the ending and I intend to roll with your suggestion. Cheers.

I liked the original but the end was a little flat after his gradiose attempts to get the answer....in my mind it would go:

DARREN IS SAT BY HIMSELF. TOM ENTERS, STICK IN HAND.

TOM
(TRIUMPHANTLY)
A penguin in a blender.

DARREN
(RELIVED)
You got it, way to go.

BOTH SIT AND SUP ON THEIR BEERS FOR A MOMENT. TOM STARES AT DARREN.

TOM
It's not is it?

EMBARRASSED SILENCE.

DARREN
Um, No, it was a newspaper.

TOM
Bloody hell, what is with you? It is so patronising when you do that.

DARREN
(EMBARRESSED)
Sorry.

David Bussell, you make me very happy.

In a non gay way.

I thought the original version was ace, really funny. You're one of my personal favourite sketch writers on here. And I'm sure you think that's a MASSIVE compliment!

I think it's a massive compliment and well-earned too.

Reminds me of a Monkeydust sketch to be honest - I have a similar sketch on a kid learning to tie his shoelaces, Great minds eh?

Either way it's a good sketch!

I thought the first version was brill. Budget wise the montage shots might be tricky. So something else... shots of the ashtray filling with cigs is a cliched example... but something like that maybe.

But like I said just the other day... I don't like to think of this material as cliche but just meeting beautifully the particular and rigorous demands of the genre. (Mine I mean.. material wise obviously)

Quote: Marc P @ April 20 2008, 7:23 PM BST

I thought the first version was brill. Budget wise the montage shots might be tricky. So something else...

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Not really, David (from what I've seen of his skills with editing ect ect) he could put together a montage, it just requires a lot of time.

Quote: Seefacts @ April 19 2008, 7:27 PM BST

David Bussell, you make me very happy.

In a non gay way.

I thought the original version was ace, really funny. You're one of my personal favourite sketch writers on here. And I'm sure you think that's a MASSIVE compliment!

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Thank you very much, Seefacts, and thanks especially for restoring faith in my original sketch. In retrospect, it would be nice that one of my pieces not end in torture or death.

Quote: M Lewis @ April 19 2008, 2:08 PM BST

I liked the original but the end was a little flat after his gradiose attempts to get the answer....in my mind it would go:

DARREN IS SAT BY HIMSELF. TOM ENTERS, STICK IN HAND.

TOM
(TRIUMPHANTLY)
A penguin in a blender.

DARREN
(RELIVED)
You got it, way to go.

BOTH SIT AND SUP ON THEIR BEERS FOR A MOMENT. TOM STARES AT DARREN.

TOM
It's not is it?

EMBARRASSED SILENCE.

DARREN
Um, No, it was a newspaper.

TOM
Bloody hell, what is with you? It is so patronising when you do that.

DARREN
(EMBARRESSED)
Sorry.

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Thanks for the suggestion, M.

Quote: Paul W @ April 20 2008, 7:11 PM BST

Reminds me of a Monkeydust sketch to be honest - I have a similar sketch on a kid learning to tie his shoelaces, Great minds eh?

Either way it's a good sketch!

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Cheers, Paul. I'll have to go back and watch Monkeydust again, I haven't seen it since it went out on the box.

Quote: Paul W @ April 20 2008, 7:33 PM BST

Not really, David (from what I've seen of his skills with editing ect ect) he could put together a montage, it just requires a lot of time.

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It's what green screen was made for.