INT. HOUSE. DAY.
AN OLD LADY, IS SITTING IN A CHAIR. TEARFUL. HER GRANDSON ENTERS WITH A CAT BASKET, WITH A KITTEN INSIDE.
GRANDSON
Here you are Gran. So sorry about what happened to Mr Tiddles... and Paws... and Lola. You don't seem to have much luck with cats since you moved.
THE CAMERA GOES ROUND THE ROOM AND FINDS THE CAT FLAP, WE GO THROUGH TO REVEAL IT OPENS DIRECTLY ONTO A MOTORWAY.
ENDS
That's nice, especially if it opens right on to a motorway. I like it.
Just had a mad vision,
cat flap opens on,
1 Revoloutinary France, there is a guillotin blade above it
2 A black hole
3 Mount doom.
4 A large pitbull chained there, with it's mouse open.
5 a cliff face, there is a pile of dead cats several hundred feet deep
6 A huge mincer, that leads into a catfood factory.
Quote: sootyj @ April 10 2008, 10:54 AM BST1 Revoloutinary France, there is a guillotin blade above it
2 A black hole
3 Mount doom.
4 A large pitbull chained there, with it's mouse open.
5 a cliff face, there is a pile of dead cats several hundred feet deep
6 A huge mincer, that leads into a catfood factory.
A very nice sketch and if we're allowed to vote then I go for number 5.
Sketch seems fine.
I remember a sketch (in the dim a distant past) of a cat flap in the window of a high rise block of flats.
Quote: Baumski @ April 10 2008, 11:09 AM BSTA very nice sketch and if we're allowed to vote then I go for number 5.
Hey you can vote all your like on Sootyj's sketchs and he may even write them, just looking for comments on my original sketch (and not really suggestions for other ideas 
)
Nice quickie, Danny.
Quote: dannyjb1 @ April 10 2008, 11:25 AM BSTjust looking for comments on my original sketch
Fair point and so my thought was that the camera should start panning away and go through the cat flap as the grandson lists the quite extensive names of the missing cats.
Quote: dannyjb1 @ April 10 2008, 11:25 AM BSTHey you can vote all your like on Sootyj's sketchs and he may even write them, just looking for comments on my original sketch (and not really suggestions for other ideas
Well I liked it, all be I can't believe it hasn't been done before. Wold you prefer me in future to PM suggestions?
Quote: dannyjb1 @ April 10 2008, 11:25 AM BSTHey you can vote all your like on Sootyj's sketchs and he may even write them, just looking for comments on my original sketch (and not really suggestions for other ideas
I know Danny, don't you just hate it when that happens. Like a kind of Forum Hostage taking....... only without the Balaclava's and Kalashnikov's.
I liked the original sketch (and Sooty's suggestions).
We've had this discussion before on people making suggestions... I think it's healthy and have benefited immensely from it in the past... perhaps the previous discussion should be resurrected because this will only end in an argument...
Nice one centurian, nice one. Nice quick short there Danny. I like it.
Sigh! Critique, is critique. That includes disagreement, suggestions, and what ever else. On at least two occaisons I've applied bits of rewrites and then sold the skits. The only thing I was, was grateful. if you don't like feedback, don't put your stuff up. Or stick to wanking in front of a mirror singing the He man theme tune (works for me). And frankly if all I'm doing is suggesting ideas for sequels (something you'll be asked for on almost any non topical show), then there's no need to be so precious.
Also the last 3 weeks I got nowt in Tilt. I put my skits up on critique, they're still there including some none submitted ones. If any oen cares to look, and tell me what i'm doing wrong, or even heaven forfend a rewrite. Then again the only thing I'll be is grateful.
It's called humility, it's what most decent writers develop.
If you don't want to, then I might suggest drops your pants, sit in front of the mirror, and after me.
"He man, He man, I have the power!"
The Goodies' 'Guide Cat' idea had me in stitches...
It's a good quickie. I liked it.