Another car sketch...

Inspired directly by winterlights Car Park sketch.... I have a horrid feeling it's been done before...

ROOF OF OFFICE BLOCK. JUMPER STANDS ON THE EDGE. MAN APPROACHES SLOWLY.

MAN:Excuse me.

JUMPERtay back. I’ll jump.

MAN:That’s what I wanted to talk to you about.

MAN GETS CLOSER.

JUMPER:You’ll not stop me. You can’t talk me out of it.

MAN STANDS NEXT TO JUMPER.

MAN:I realise that, it’s just that...

JUMPER:What? I’ve got so much to live for? Things can’t be that bad? Well I haven’t and they are.

MAN:Well... you see... could you move about five feet to your left.

JUMPER:Why, so that you can grab me and pull me back?

MAN:No..(POINTING DOWN) That’s my car. It took me twenty minutes to find that space.

kjs

Not bad. Last line is a tad too long.

Yesterday suicide gags and today jumping off high buildings.
Where is the love?

Cheers... duly noted and slightly pruned...

kjs

Nice.

This line is a bit confusing though:

"What? I’ve got so much to live for. Things can’t be that bad. Well I haven’t and they are."

Sentences 2 and 3 need question marks.

You're quite right...

Thanks Mr Bussell...

kjs