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Internet dangers

DARK LIGHTING, THREATENING, ATMOSPHERIC MUSIC. SHOW PERSONS EYES, HAIR. BUT IMPOSSIBLE TO IDENTIFY THEIR AGE OR ANYTHING ELSE.

CUT TO HANDS TYPING.

SHOW SCREEN AS WORDS APPEAR.

TYPES OUT: I THINK HE IS REALLY GREAT. PEOPLE SHOULD LAY OFF HIM.

VOICEOVER:
The person you are talking to online might not be who they say they are.

PAN OUT TO SHOW IT’S A YOUNG BOY TYPING

SHOW THAT HE’S BEEN WRITING ON A GUARDIAN UNLIMITED MESSAGE BOARD ABOUT THE ZIMBABWE ELECTIONS

Thats good, and I like the joke, but maybe a little more explanation

Maybe a final line,

beware daily mail readers can use the internet too.

Its good Barbs but I think the words he types should sound more sinister as those adverts you are lampooning are to warn against predatory paedophiles.

True, ajp - I saw an ad and knocked it out in literally 30 seconds. It could definitely be refined.

I don't know about the Daily Mail line sooty - I agree maybe more explanation - or extending it slightly, but, much as I hate the DM, I'm not sure this is the sketch to slag it off in.

Fair play, I think it jsut needs one other line at some point to clarify whats a really good gag.

Quote: Barbs @ April 4 2008, 4:19 PM BST

DARK LIGHTING, THREATENING, ATMOSPHERIC MUSIC. SHOW PERSONS EYES, HAIR. BUT IMPOSSIBLE TO IDENTIFY THEIR AGE OR ANYTHING ELSE.

CUT TO HANDS TYPING.

SHOW SCREEN AS WORDS APPEAR.

TYPES OUT: I THINK HE IS REALLY GREAT. PEOPLE SHOULD LAY OFF HIM.

VOICEOVER:
The person you are talking to online might not be who they say they are.

PAN OUT TO SHOW IT’S A YOUNG BOY TYPING

SHOW THAT HE’S BEEN WRITING ON A GUARDIAN UNLIMITED MESSAGE BOARD ABOUT THE ZIMBABWE ELECTIONS

Very good. :)

Haha, yes, I like it. Nice twist! :)

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