Spaghetti

EXT - A WILD WEST TOWN - DAY

THE SUN BEATS DOWN ON A DESERTED MAIN STREET. A TUMBLEWEED BLOWS THROUGH. A WIERD OLD MAN SITS IN THE SALOON DOORWAY. HE'S CARVING A PIECE OF WOOD WITH A SHARP KNIFE AND CHEWING SOMETHING. HE SPITS. THE DUST AT HIS FEET PUFFS UP IN A MINI CLOUD AND A DARK STAIN FORMS ON THE GROUND.

A DOOR CREAKS AND A MEAN LOOKING HOMBRE WALKS OUT AND TAKES UP A POSITION RIGHT IN THE CENTRE OF THE STREET AT ONE END.

ANOTHER DOOR CREAKS AND A SECOND FIGURE APPEARS AT THE OPPOSITE END OF THE STREET. HE'S WEARING A PONCHO AND HAS A SMALL CIGAR CLAMPED BETWEEN HIS TEETH.

MEAN GUY:
If'n it ain't mister goody two shoes. Come to see the sun for the last time my friend?

GOOD GUY:
Let's just see who's gonna see the sun for the last time amigo.

ANOTHER DOOR CREAKS AND A WOMAN WALKS INTO THE MIDDLE OF THE STREET. HALF-WAY BETWEEN THE TWO MEN.

AT THAT SECOND BOTH MEN DRAW THEIR GUNS AND FIRE. THEY BOTH HIT THE WOMAN WHO FALLS TO THE GROUND.

MEAN GUY:
Oh bums!

GOOD GUY:
Sheee yit!

BOTH MEN RUN TOWARDS THE WOMAN AND MEET IN THE MIDDLE. IT'S NO USE THE WOMAN'S GONE. A BELL TOLLS.

MEAN GUY:
Fancy a whisky?

GOOD GUY:
I don't think so amigo. I'm on a diet. No alcohol see? I've lost a stone and don't want to slide back. I'll just have a still water.

BOTH WALK TOWARDS THE SALOON AND PASS THE WIERD LOOKING MAN.

GOOD GUY:
And will you stop spitting for godness sake you filthy dirty little bastard.

END:

It works in an odd sort of, it shouldn't kinda way. But work it does.

Hey Blenks

I reckon it needs a bit of work.

I think you need a couple of visual gags in the first bit -- guy could be carving something funny and the stain could spell something out in a tea-leaves kinda way.

There's no reason for the woman to run out really. If we hear an argument and she bangs through the saloon doors and runs into the street it would make the shooting more believable.

Dan

Hello you fellows.

I didn't want it to be too involved just a parody of the Spaghetti Western genre. It's all really just a set up for an unusual reveal so I wanted it to be uncluttered and sparse just like those movies are.

The woman runs out as she's the cause of the showdown between the two protagonists(maybe me being too subtle there as I thought that it might have been picked up in the action).

Though I did quite like the extra visual gag ideas Dan, but from the perspective of the feel I was going for I'd discount them. Like the other sketch about the Apprentice this was straight down on the page. Just *rough sketch ideas* for possible development. No honing or editing so not really the finished article.