I feel like this one needs a line of dialogue at the end maybe...
INT. KITCHEN – NIGHT
BALLOONS AND STREAMERS ADORN THE WALLS.
A MAN DRUMS HIS FINGERS. HE WEARS A TRAPPED LOOK.
MAN:
I always find the best conversations happen in the kitchen at parties, don’t you?
HE SMILES UNCOMFORTABLY AT THE MAN OPPOSITE.
A MIME.
TO HIS LEFT… A BUCKINGHAM PALACE GUARD.
TO HIS RIGHT… A HUMAN STATUE.
MAN:
(sigh)
Really nice idea, but like your nightmare one needs a bit more exploration., perhaps.
I'm really liking some of your ideas.
I like this one too.
Maybe if in a follow up he says,
I can't believe you'd say something so offensive.
Thanks for the support all. Here's a little re-tune that might improve things:
INT. KITCHEN – NIGHT
BALLOONS AND STREAMERS ADORN THE WALLS.
A MAN DRUMS HIS FINGERS. HE WEARS A TRAPPED LOOK.
MAN:
I always find the best conversations happen in the kitchen at parties, don’t you?
HE SMILES UNCOMFORTABLY AT THE MAN OPPOSITE.
A MIME.
TO HIS LEFT… A BUCKINGHAM PALACE GUARD.
TO HIS RIGHT… A HUMAN STATUE.
MAN:
(sigh)
A PRETTY WOMAN ENTERS. SHE WHISPERS IN THE MAN’S EAR.
WOMAN:
You look like you need rescuing.
THE MAN SMILES AND FOLLOWS HER OUT.
INT. LOUNGE – CONTINUOUS
THEY ARRIVE IN THE LOUNGE. LIVELY MUSIC IS PLAYING. THE MAN SMILES.
WOMAN:
I’ll leave you to it. Have fun.
SHE LEAVES. THE MAN LOOKS PUT OUT.
HE SHRUGS AND GOES TO INTRODUCE HIMSELF TO THE OTHER PEOPLE IN THE ROOM.
A TOWN CRYER.
A MARKET TRADER.
AND AN AUCTIONEER.
ALL AT ONCE THEY BEGIN BRAYING, RINGING BELLS AND POUNDING HAMMERS.
MAN:
(Sigh)
I like the second one too. Perhaps you could just have three women talking about handbags instead.
It's a surefire way to capture the feminist demographic.
I prefer the first, think the second makes it overly long and maybe too obvious a way to go, just my thoughts.
To furthur the first one maybe at the end we see a couple signing to each other, the man turns, he gives them a forced smile and a double thumbs up....or not 