Quote: Mike Greybloke @ March 28, 2008, 2:39 PMI agree with ian_w over the ending. The look of utter disbelief doesn't really do anything.
If the husband considered what his wife had just said and made a wordless expression/nod of "yeah, good point", it'd be improved. I think.
Exactly right.
Just made the changes? What do you think? Thanks Guys.
A little too repetetive:
Quote: Paul Carroll @ March 28, 2008, 12:36 AMWoman
Yeah, I suppose you're right, but they give great head.(CAMERA CUTS TO HUSBAND WHO LOOKS LIKE HE IS THINKING)
Man
Yeah, you're right, they do.
How about:
Woman
But they give great head.
THE HUSBAND PONDERS.
Man
Yeah, they do.
Nice one guys. The feedback is much appreciated.
Obviously I've only seen this since you've edited it.
Good one.