INT. NIGHT. BEDROOM.
A MAN IS SNORING LOUDLY AND KEEPING HIS WIFE AWAKE.
WIFE: Rollover on to your side you oaf.
HUSBAND: (SFX SNORE).
WIFE: Put a bloody sock in it.
HUSBAND: (SFX SNORE).
IN THE DARKNESS THERE IS THREE FLASHES TOGETHER WITH GUNSHOT SOUNDS.
HUSBAND: What the f**k was that?
WIFE: (shouting) Starting pistol. I'm f**king deaf now. Night.
ENDS.
Sorry it's to simple, and predictable to really work.
Correct Sooty, slight change made.
I like this but she only needs to shoot once.
Much improved, I moan and the world changes.
Truly I am a God.
First off, lines like these:
WIFE: Rollover on to your side you oaf.
WIFE: Put a bloody sock in it.
No-one speaks like this, least of in the middle of the night. You could carry this across with prods and harrumphs and the sketch would be all the better for it.
As to the joke, maybe it would work better if she gets frustrated to the point where we see her put the gun to head and shoot. Her husband thinks she's topped herself. Then go for the punch.
Quick question: How would she know her husband was talking, and what the question was if it is dark and she is now deaf?
Quote: wayne lewis @ March 28, 2008, 4:40 PMQuick question: How would she know her husband was talking, and what the question was if it is dark and she is now deaf?
I did wonder!
cheers for comments folks