Girl Guide Sketch

I just knocked this one up. Anyone think it's worth going back and working on?

Ext. Front of house.

A girl guide knocks on the door. The door opens to reveal a man.

Girl Guide: Hello, I'm collecting for the girl guides.

Man: Girl guides, eh? That takes me back.

Girl Guide: Your daughter was a girl guide?

Man: Daughter? I haven't got a daughter.

Girl Guide: Oh. So what did you have to do with the guides?

Man: (LAUGHS) I was one!

Girl Guide: Don't you mean the Scouts?

Man: Scouts?

Girl Guide: Yeah, that's what boys join.

Man: Boys? What are you talking about?

Girl Guide: Well, you're a... boy.

Man: What?

Girl Guide: Look.

The Girl Guide takes a vanity mirror from her pocket and hands it to the man. The man looks in it.

Man: Oh. My. God!

Another man walks up to the door from inside the house. He looks at the man.

Man 2: Dinners getting cold, darling!

The man looks despondent.

Man 2: What's the matter, dear?

Man: (SIGHS) I've got something to tell you.

ENDS

Love it. No complaints from me. Absolutely love it.

Haha, yeah it was good.

Cool. That one only took 10 minutes to knock up from the first idea to posting it.

I think some of the dialogue could be altered to be more natural, but great that you guys' like it.

Yet another killer, and fantastically underwritten. Very confident, you assume that the viewer will make intellectual leaps which they do.

Very Very Good!

Outstanding. The more I read of your stuff, the more impressed I get. I'd commission a sketch show from you if I could.