Arseholes Page 2

Hey Sooty

I like this one a lot. Needs a rewrite (bit longer with more tension) and could be in for next series of Tilt.

Dan

Thanks there's a sequel, called Arsehole 2 (original 'aint I)

I sent it them to Tilt amalgamarted into 1.

Some nice ideas here. I presume that 'John' is the focus for further sketches and therefore is the focus of the comedy, in which case I am unsure about leaving the sketch on a line that involves a laugh around David Cameron being a c**t.

I'ts a good line dont get me wrong, it's just I would leave any political angles alone for this type of sketch.

Thank god i'm not alone! I thought it was ok until the swipe at Cameron.....just felt so out of place, the target, the way its said, the language...none of it fits with the rest. And if your aim is to have a stab at Cameron then having an arsehole not like him seems counterproductive anyway.

I dumped it for the version I sent, and changed it to a comic relief style appeal.

I'll post the final version if I can find it.