Battlefield

EXT - A BATTLEFIELD - DAY

SMOKE AND EXPLOSIONS ALL AROUND. TWO CAVALRY SOLDIERS ARE ON HORSEBACK AND CHARGING THE ENEMY LINES. SUDDENLY SOLDIER # 1 IS HIT BY A BULLET. HE FALLS OFF THE HORSE TO THE GROUND AND LIES IN THE MUD.

CLOSE UP ON HIM LYING WITH HIS FACE HALF-BURRIED IN THE DIRT. IT SEEMS AS IF HE'S A GONNER. SOLDIER # 2 CHECKS HIS HORSE AND SWINGS ROUND TO WHERE HIS COMRADE HAS FALLEN.

SOLDIER # 1 SEES HIS COMARDE COMING BACK TO HELP HIM.

SOLDIER # 1
No leave me. I'm done for! Crack on and you may get back to safety.

SOLDIER #2:
Do you think I would leave you lying when there's room on my horse for two?

SOLDIER # 1 LOOKS AT THE CAMERA QUIZICALLY IN AN OLIVER HARDY STYLE.

ROLF HARRIS (VO SINGING)
But I think it's that I remember when we were two little boys.

END

I think I get it, but it's a little on the weak side, you've written better.

Yeah

I imagined it being a lot funnier than it looks on the page. Just meant to be a bit silly really.

Well it could work. The idea of people unwittingly acting out Rolfe songs, cathicng on, and then him appearing singing the song by surprise.

It doesn't really do anything does it apart from repeat the song.

Maybe what would make it funny would be if Soldier 2 is holding a wooden hobby horse.

It could work if part of a series of similar sketches but it's a silly one. Still it's ok

Sunnyside that was the idea in my mind really with a series of these. But It's not terribly good, I just have a feeling it might be funnier seen than read in a sort of Vic and Bob style

In its current format its not terribly funny but the potential is there. For example a grandad telling his grankids a old wartime story etc, something like that.