gone!
TV Pitch sketch
i liked this up until the end. the ending was a bit weak for me and wasn't really a "punchline".
how about a giant rabbit is waiting for the writer when he gets thrown out?
A GIANT RABBIT IS SEEN SITTING IN THE CORRIDOR.
MAN: They didn't like it Sexy.
MAN AND RABBIT WALK OFF DOWN THE CORRIDOR. RABBIT TOUCHES MANS ARSE.
MAN: Will you give it a bloody rest!
Thats a much better ending!
is that sarcasm? can never tell in the written form.
seriously though i thought it was good. well written.
Quote: wayne lewis @ February 26, 2008, 9:08 PMi liked this up until the end. the ending was a bit weak for me and wasn't really a "punchline".
how about a giant rabbit is waiting for the writer when he gets thrown out?
A GIANT RABBIT IS SEEN SITTING IN THE CORRIDOR.
MAN: They didn't like it Sexy.
MAN AND RABBIT WALK OFF DOWN THE CORRIDOR. RABBIT TOUCHES MANS ARSE.
MAN: Will you give it a bloody rest!
Like this ending very much.
Great sketch
I honestly like your ending. Pm me your details so I can give you a writing credit if it ever goes anywhere
don't be daft. you can have that one. thanks anyway.
I agree - good idea and rounded off well by Wayne.
I agree, I think it's written beautifully but the alternative ending is stronger.
With the new ending you've got yourself a sweet little sketch. What a steal!
Yes it's like Dempsey and Makepeace together it's unstoppable.
I've edited the original to contain Wayne's ending now. A job well done.
I think Wayne's ending of the sketch hilarious
The very definition of collaboration.
I loved it, I don't personally think there is anything wrong with the end either, sure think it through find another one fair play, but in my opinion got a gooden there WL.