Christ what a hospital

A man rushes in with a woman who is obviously ill, there is a nun at a hospital desk.

ManQuick it’s my wife, she’s not well.

NurseWhat seem to be the problem?

ManShe’s delirious she’s hot to the touch, she’s shaking all over.
NurseQuick get me some firewood, on rope stat, we’ve got a witch needs to be burnt urgently.

ManWhat kind of hospital is this?

NurseSt John, and St Elizabeth, we practise medication according to strict Catholic doctrine.

ManYou’re bloody cracked, she’s delirious because she’s gone into labour, she’s pregnant.

NurseAh who’s the father.

WomanSod off, I don’t know

ManQuite the mystery isn’t it?

NurseMystery, you say,

Gets on phone

NurseI need him down here stat, not a Dr you idiot, the Pope, it’s a second coming.

mr bump

Needs restructuring - at least something to separate the character from the dialogue.

I think to some extent your trying to get the joke out without working too much on it.

Sorry - just being honest and trying to be helpful.

I read it twice to see if I had missed something. Sorry sootyj, I think I must have. Sorry!

Agree with Dave on this one sooty. Think it needs the kiss of life.

When I write I usually read 3 papers, and internet news feeds....I really like topical humour.

Unfortunately it means at times I hook into stories no one else has hear, or cares about.

In this Bishop Cormack Wanker O'Conner saint of hidden pedos. Has decided that this major Catholic hospital in London should work to stricter religious principles. The wanker would be welcome in Al Quaeda, unfortunately didn't make for a funny skit, may have anther go at some time.

I also like to think I've written better, to the bin with you cursed skit!

Quote: sootyj @ February 23, 2008, 9:18 PM

When I write I usually read 3 papers, and internet news feeds....I really like topical humour.

Unfortunately it means at times I hook into stories no one else has hear, or cares about.

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Just take more time - and think about the layout - as Charley would say.

I liked the sketch sootyj. Didn't know about the story. It needs more puns though, which shouldn't be hard as you have puns coming out of you're... *hands over end of the sentence to sootyj*

sketch was not bad. You have defo done better ones.
This bit creased me up though.

Man She’s delirious she’s hot to the touch, she’s shaking all over.
Nurse Quick get me some firewood, on rope stat, we’ve got a witch needs to be burnt urgently.