My Last Laugh competition ending
Quote: Chimes of Freedom @ February 9, 2008, 6:54 PM**
HELEN:
You have to understand that my position is very important to me.
...
BEN:
but we can’t do anything fancy in here. There’s not enough room.
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HELEN:
Yes. If we’re going to do it, you’ll need . . . you know . . . some sort of protection.BEN:
From who? You said you didn’t have a boyfriend.
**HELEN (CONT):
I mean I don’t want to get caught. You know . . . caught?BEN:
Don’t worry. There’s no chance of that.HELEN:
You mean you’ve had the snip?BEN:
I mean I’ve locked the door.
**BEN (REALISING WHAT SHE MEANS):
Oh, right. I know what you mean. You mean you don’t want me getting you up the duff.HELEN:
(TO CAM) By George, I think he’s got it.
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Not really my cup of tea.
The examples above illustrate the kind of jokes that I find too "easy" and really just tiresome. Like in a poor Carry On Film in this instance! Position & protection gags I found particularly corny, while the "caught" gag was a lot more slick but based on the assumption that the woman would say "I don't want to get caught" and mean get caught without a condom: a bit of a tenuous premise IMO (but then others may disagree if they've used this phrase themselves!) The "By George I think he's got it line" made me cringe a little.
Quite liked the "on the pill"/"on the change" joke though. That was better to me because it packed a double payload of the pun and the inadvertent insult - and it was to my mind a "fresher" joke.
In general though it seemed filled with well worn gags and situations and as such it didn't impress anything upon me. However, this sort of thing doesn't float my boat anyway so you might get far more positive feedback from other quarters.
Yeah, that's cool. 
You two should get a room while it's all hunky dory. 
Quote: Badge @ February 10, 2008, 12:59 AMYou two should get a room while it's all hunky dory.
If you're going to try and be clever at least give the guy (or gal?) a bit of critique as well! 
Incidentally, does anyone have the original opening? Maybe it's lingering on the 'net somewhere. Thought it could be an interesting exercise for those who didn't enter the competition to see what they can come up with now, and post 'em up. I didn't enter it and fancy a go!
You actually post something that i can read but its too long to read at the moment >_< Never fear I will save this page and turn this post into a critique at a later date