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A classic case of now you see it . . . now you don't. 
Wedding
Hmm...
I have to say that the punchline didn't work for me... it didn't really turn anything on its head IMO. I was left thinking: "OK... plausible... so what?"
The setup is nice but the punchline did not defy expectation in any way for me, so in that regard can't be said to really be a punchline.
If we had something invested in the character it may be funny, as part of a sitcom perhaps.
I liked the way the girl obviously lied about her age to get wed.
You know how some peeps say "Ohhhh that sketch is too looooooooong".
Well I would like to see it lengthened & prey on that tag more, without giving it away.
Hope I am making sense but I have a terrible feeling I am rambling.
This is a very funny sketch.
Anyone who say's it's not funny is lying - probably because they're shite at comedy themselves and they're jealous of my dazzling talent.
Only joking.
Or am I? 
Not bad but the punch line is a bit obvious, if the police came in and took her away, and he said
"Thats alright I'm......"
an endangered species
Carlos the Jackal
an Alsation
or any of a range of things an underage girl should not be sleeping wiht
Like with your stuntman sketch, the build-up is good, so that you then feel a bit let down when the punch-line doesn't quite match it. Although I must say, I'm a fine one to talk, I find it impossible to finish most sketches.
Or are you envisaging a series of sketches with the same type of application form punch-line?
I also think, like Charley the build-up is a bit too brief. I hate wordy sketches, but this seemed too quick, when you wanted a bit more romance/sex in order to see it effectively punctured.
I still thought it a good sketch though.
Quote: John Kelly @ February 4, 2008, 10:27 PMAre you envisaging a series of sketches with the same type of application form punch-line?
Give that man a prize!
Yes, I'm envisaging a series of sketches in which the guy appears in various skill-dependent situations and in which in becomes clear that he's embellished his CV more than a little.
The 'wedding' sketch was intended to be the last sketch in series. The groom would be the guy in the other sketches and it would hopefully be funny to see the tables turned on him.
However, even as a standalone sketch, it's still funny.
AUDIENCE (IN HARMONY):
Oh, no it isn't!
ME:
Oh, yes it is!
. . . and so, ad infinitum.
Quote: Chimes of Freedom @ February 4, 2008, 10:42 PMGive that man a prize!
Yes, I'm envisaging a series of sketches in which the guy appears in various skill-dependent situations and in which in becomes clear that he's embellished his CV more than a little.
The 'wedding' sketch was intended to be the last sketch in series. The groom would be the guy in the other sketches and it would hopefully be funny to see the tables turned on him.
In this context it works far better IMO. On its own I am left thinking "...So what...?"
Premise ok but delivery not so good. Still you can have a tilt at one of mine Chimes. I'll duck.
I assume this sketch is part of a running gag, and that your stuntman sketch is another part of the series. Nice idea, and as a running gag would be funny. Good stuff.
Whoops - sorry, I posted that last comment before reading the thread through properly.
Quote: Chimes of Freedom @ February 4, 2008, 10:42 PMYes, I'm envisaging a series of sketches in which the guy appears in various skill-dependent situations and in which in becomes clear that he's embellished his CV more than a little.
Isn't that just those awful Catherine tate sketches?
The sketch was good. It would be more funny if it was more obvious. Call Chris Langham, he'll have some ideas.
Quote: Chimes of Freedom @ February 4, 2008, 10:42 PMHowever, even as a standalone sketch, it's still funny.
No.
No, I don't think it is.
I'm not sold on this one so mark me up as "shite at comedy".
Perhaps if the ending were accompanied by a spinning bow tie or a swanny whistle?
Quote: David Bussell @ February 5, 2008, 5:26 PMPerhaps if the ending were accompanied by a spinning bow tie or a swanny whistle?
GENIUS!
That's going into the final draft!
Comedy Hall of Fame, here I come !!!!!!!!