I like the new setup to the sketch/concept I think its a much better start. I thought the new version was a bit too wordy in places though, especially a couple of Danny's lines. But it probably all comes down to delivery. Which we wont know until you get it performed! 
Oh and I preferred the original version of this line.
Gavin: No. Lard. (POINTS AT TROLLEY) It’s ALL lard based.
Except I'd lose the 'based'
I liked the second draft for this much better. Dear God, lose that 6 pack line though. And Shoepie's suggestion about the 'lard' line is spot on.
Quite like this - and I don't think the 6 pack line's as bad as all that, but rather the way it's written that makes it sound a bit eggy. As in "Let's push on to an 8 pack (PAUSE) of lager." For me it'd work much better if you lose the "of lager" bit to make it sound a little less forced.
Plus because your funniest line "Feel the burn" is near the end, I'd make it the final line so you go out on a big laugh. At the moment you get your big laugh, then the sketch sort of peters out a bit.
Taken your ideas into consideration and incorporated them. I've re-edited the second draft.
Perry was right about the "Feel the burn" line being the finish line. "No pain, no gain" is just a repeat of that.