Your work is so tired, it needs a lie down.
Critique you would 'really' like to write.
The dialogue in your sketch was as original as this:
WOMAN:
Sshh!
MAN:
What?
WOMAN:
Listen!
MAN:
What?
WOMAN:
Listen!
MAN:
I can't hear anything.
WOMAN:
(CRYPTICALLY) Exactly...
Now I know what it's like to have my family tortured and killed while being buggered by a brontosaurus.
That's not funny, it's silly.
Oh, you multi-layered little minx. Is that a reply to mine or a crit that you'd love to write?
That's what you get for being too sophisticated. 
nope
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your gay
(I can't let that one lie. "You just couldn't let it lie, could you?!!"
I would have to do a Kent Pete to satisfy my craving for such an artless and grammatically incorrect critique as this, I'm afraid!)
What about my gay? 
Quote: James Williams @ January 10, 2008, 9:41 PMyour gay
Should that not be you're gay? As in you are?
Quote: Frankie Rage @ January 10, 2008, 9:35 PMnope
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Frankie. I bet you remember when people at the pictures said: "This is where we came in".
Quote: Ray Dawson @ January 10, 2008, 9:44 PMShould that not be you're gay? As in you are?
Nearly as quick as me there! 
Quote: EllieJP @ January 10, 2008, 9:43 PMWhat about my gay?
Yes yes, we know you women love The Gays.
That's a good critique in itself too actually.
Quote: JohnnyD @ January 10, 2008, 9:44 PMFrankie. I bet you remember when people at the pictures said: "This is where we came in".
There's nothing new under the Sun.. 
Quote: EllieJP @ January 10, 2008, 9:45 PMNearly as quick as me there!
Only because i don't have a broken ankle 
See, I knew I'd regret posting that. Stop toying with me. The error was intentional, as I acknowledged in parenthesis. I just want to break free sometimes. *Sobs*