It is far more constructive to say. Your work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture. Than, "I didn't like it",and
"No,I didn't like it iether". and, "I like funny jokes like," (listen to this)
A man has a heart attack every 2mins and,(wait for it)he's fed up with it.
Try more helpful remarks, for instance. Your work reads like a reply from the Ministry of Health and Social Security.
Well there it is, a few handy tips. Please add your own.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 7, 2008, 11:15 PMIt is far more constructive to say. Your work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture.
Your work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture.
Quote: ajp29 @ January 7, 2008, 11:32 PMYour work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture.
That's plagiarism!
I have to content myself with throwing rotting fruit.
My tips to help critique:
1. Don't just put "I didn't like it" or "I liked it". Try something more expressive like "I really didn't like it" or "I liked it lots". That will help the writer far more.
2. Never be totally negative. A neat trick is find something about the writing you like and comment on it. "Clever use of a underlining" is a personal favourite.
3. Always point out that the script you've written was much better than theirs and it still got rejected.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 7, 2008, 11:15 PMIt is far more constructive to say. Your work reads like a leaflet explaining the assembly of flat-pack furniture. Than, "I didn't like it",and
"No,I didn't like it iether". and, "I like funny jokes like," (listen to this)
A man has a heart attack every 2mins and,(wait for it)he's fed up with it.
Try more helpful remarks, for instance. Your work reads like a reply from the Ministry of Health and Social Security.Well there it is, a few handy tips. Please add your own.
Your grammar is very confusing...I don't know when a sentence is starting/ending/doing what.
You poor thing.
Quote: Badge @ January 8, 2008, 12:06 AMThat's plagiarism!
I retract, I retract!
One of the best ones I saw was by Godot I think, it was a simple -
nope
It angered me at the time but I now thinks it's hilarious (in a way)
It always makes me smile (in a nice way) in critique when someone resists even the most benign suggestion for a change to a piece.
crap
that's often a fair one too, I've had that aimed at me/my stuff over on 4laughs.. also
Crap and CRAP!!!
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 8, 2008, 12:37 AMYou poor thing.
See that one made sense 
but if you ever want a producer to look at your work, you have to punctuate correctly otherwise they'll just chuck it straight in the bin, regardless of the pieces actual quality.
Quote: Frankie Rage @ January 8, 2008, 12:40 AMOne of the best ones I saw was by Godot I think, it was a simple -
nope
That is brilliant! (as long as it's not your piece of work being analysed like that!)
I had the post looked at by my neighbour, who is an Oxford Don. He says it is perfect grammar, the confusion, is in the transfer of the text from the entry box to the site page. Cattyrisma, If you think different, I would appreciate your version. I am always willing to learn.
Seriously though, Louis Walsh, nails corpses. Doesn't care how long they've been dead, how decayed they are. Loves that cold stiff ass.
Quote: charisma @ January 8, 2008, 12:33 AMYour grammar is very confusing...I don't know when a sentence is starting/ending/doing what.
I hope that Jerf constructed houses better than he has sentences.