Star Trekin'

Int-Bridge of The Starship Enterprise - Day

KIRK, SPOCK AND ALL THE USUAL SUSPECTS AT THEIR STATIONS.

MR CHEKOV
Transmission coming in Captain.

KIRK:
On Screen Mr Chekov.

SCREEN SHOWING STARFIELD CHANGES TO VIDEO PICTURE.

SCARY LOOKING MAN (ON SCREEN)
Have you been hurt in a beaming accident that wasn't your fault? Then call Injury Life Forms for you. Our...

KIRK:
What's the meaning of this Mr Chekov?

MR CHEKOV:
Sorry Captain. Just let me...

HE FIDDLES WITH SOME BUTTONS ON HIS CONSOLE. THE IMAGE ON-SCREEN CHANGES

BARRY SCOTT (BELLOWING):
HI I'M BARRY SCOTT. ARE YOU HAVING TROUBLE WITH GREASE AND GRIME THAT YOU JUST CAN'T SHIFT?

KIRK (FINGERS IN EARS)
Mr Checkov expalin yourself!

MR CHEKOV:
Captain I don't know what is happening!

HE FIDDLES WITH THE CONSOLE AGAIN.

VOICEOVER:
Is debt getting the better of you? Maybe you've overdone it on your holidays in the Gamma Quadrant. Too many trips down the Venusian lap dancing club? Well don't worry help is at hand. Here at Galaxy loans we...

MR CHEKOV:
Captain I am truly sorry. I don't know how this can be happening. I'll just...

HE FIDDLES WITH THE BUTTONS AGAIN.

KIRK:
No Mr Chekov! Leave it just a minute. Let's hear what they've got to say (PAUSE)

KIRK LOOKS AROUND THE BRIDGE FURTIVELY. EYES DARTING BACK AND FORTH

KIRK
Oh bollocks!

MR SPOCK RAISES AN EYBROW IN A QUIZZICAL MANNER.

END:

Help me understand the "Oh bollocks" part. This ending confuses me.

I think it's quite a good idea that could benefit from some development. No holidays in the Gamma Quadrant for the original Star Trek crew though, it's too far away and the wormhole wasn't discovered then...
Forget I said that.

Mmmm the run-up held my attention and I thought it was a neat idea and has potential to expand on same general them. Didn't get the ending either though. I know explaining gags is a pain ... but if the script doesn't do the job what else is there!?!

I understood the ending but it was a bit weak, I reckon. I took it to mean Kirk was interested in the debt advice as, presumably, he was in debt. He revealed this and was a bit pissed off. (Although, of course, they don't use money any more in the Star Trek future, by several accounts... I'm not a geek, I just have a good memory, honest.)

As I say, it was a good idea but the execution was a bit off.

Think it could be funnier if a broader range of on-screen ideas was explored (rather than just naff daytime adverts), e.g. Windows screensaver. In fact, I think a funnier skit would be:

SCENE: ENTERPRISE BRIDGE.
WE SEE THE VIEWE-SCREEN, FILLED WITH THE USUAL STARS IN THE BLACK OF SPACE. THEN, THE WORDS 'KIRK SMELLS' SCROLL ACROSS THE SCREEN IN PINK LETTERING.

KIRK:
OK, who's been fiddling with the view-screen?

ENDS
Or maybe not, I don't know! Maybe you could use the dancing baby too!

As any Trekie would tell you they eliminated money so they wouldn't be in debt

Yeah the punchline was a bit weird and you confused everyone with the unecessary bollocks bit at the end. So ditch the last line and you'll hit warp 9