Deleted.
Cheers for the comments.
SvS
Skib & Skub -- Episode 1
I like the aggression and anger in this. In many way's it'll be the dilemma we'll all eventually face re: artistic integrity. That's why I'm drinking plenty of fluids.
If I'd make a constructive crit, I'd wonder if it needed the first scene? Would it loose anything by starting in the office?
Where have you been, Skib?
Pretty much with SlagA on this one. I quite liked it - the anger and the idea of compromising artistic integrity for a shot at the big time.
Quote: SlagA @ November 25, 2007, 5:07 PMI like the aggression and anger in this. In many way's it'll be the dilemma we'll all eventually face re: artistic integrity. That's why I'm drinking plenty of fluids.
If I'd make a constructive crit, I'd wonder if it needed the first scene? Would it loose anything by starting in the office?
Where have you been, Skib?
Cheers, Slag and Blenkinsop.
No, I don't think it would lose anything. Director's choice.
Good idea.
Well it's lost everything now Skib.
I was just about to give you the benefit of another opinion but it's gorn!
Frankie xxx
I like it
Quote: Badge @ November 27, 2007, 12:28 AMI like it
I think you are just blinded by the fact that Skib wrote it rather than what is actually "there"...
Try to look at the piece in isolation ignoring past glories (I know it's difficult to do this)
I am not saying I dislike it but for me at any rate, it's not quite "there enough" somehow!!!
Sorry Skib!
I agree. It's definitely lacking something.
Yes simply typing the word 'deleted' does not a sitcom make....come now man.
It's still better than Extras.
Yes, yes. Episode 2 will be coming soon. Perhaps Thursday morning. It's already finished but, hey, the f**ken time to post it and dick around with the spacings and so forth, that can wait until Thursday.
What you said was funny, Frankie.
Once out of seven hundred and ninety six thousand attempts is better than a complete zero, dontcha think?
Now, now, let's not turn things sour. You're a horrible creature on many levels and deserve to be employee of the month at Wimpeys in perpetuity, and yet your relentless attempts for affection via your backslapping type of 12 Rating humour has a vague ameliorating affect upon my groinal region thus stimulating me to wanna grab you and violently bounce your naked pinched-brown rabbit hole up & down upon my cowboy tool.
Just kidding of course, FR.
Just kidding.
Ha ha.
Hee hee.
I find this part even better
Quote: Skibbington von Skubber @ November 28, 2007, 1:26 AMYes, yes. Episode 2 will be coming soon. Perhaps Thursday morning. It's already finished but, hey, the f**ken time to post it and dick around with the spacings and so forth, that can wait until Thursday.
What you said was funny, Frankie.
Once out of seven hundred and ninety six thousand attempts is better than a complete zero, dontcha think?
Now, now, let's not turn things sour. You're a horrible creature on many levels and deserve to be employee of the month at Wimpeys in perpetuity, and yet your relentless attempts for affection via your backslapping type of 12 Rating humour has a vague ameliorating affect upon my groinal region thus stimulating me to wanna grab you and violently bounce your naked pinched-brown rabbit hole up & down upon my cowboy tool.
Just kidding of course, FR.
Just kidding.
Ha ha.
Hee hee.
This is more like it! This is Episode 1 revisited is it? I'm honoured to get such a long mention! As for being 'bummed by you' you make it sound delightful!
Only kidding, of course! 
Roll on Episode 2!!!