Mobile Phone Short FIlm

Spooky, I like it. Was waiting for the gentle jokes to develop for a while before I realised it wasn't meant to be a side-splitter! I wonder how the story could develop? I suppose it could go anywhere. Perhaps Tim comes under some threat, and starts acting paranoid. Maybe Andrea doesn't believe him. If he does finally get captured, we find out what happened to Lee. Anyway, I thought it was interesting and well written.

I really enjoyed this; a very nice fusion of the amusing and eerie.

I'd love to see it if it was ever filmed.

I was scared!! But it's well written. YOu seem to have got writing between 2 lovers exactly right. Nice one! Flows well and the imagery is excellent!

Thanks for the feedback, having read it again I think I might film it, seems easy enough.

I'm not sure I follow this. So the mobile phone is his captor?