I posted a few scenes from my abandoned sitcom recently and decided to share another one with you. It's set towards the end of the episode, so I'll give you the basic rundown of whats happened so far.
The sitcoms set in a live music venue called The Met Lounge, a venue which is struggling. The hottest new band in the UK, The Joyriders, have had their gig cancelled at The Met's rival club on safety grounds. The Met Lounge have stepped in and given The Joyriders a gig at their place. Gram is the assistant manager of the venue and Matt is his idiotic assistant. Also, a new barmaid has started there today and Gram has just secured a date with her. This scene takes place out in the reception area just before the gig starts.
Let me know what you think. It was written a few months ago and I acknowledge that I do perhaps 'over detail' the action.
Scene 12
Int. Reception area of The Met
Matt is at the front desk. He is taking payment for entry, taking coats and hanging them up behind him. The two customers at the desk pay and go in. Up steps a young man.
Matt: That’ll be £10, my friend
The young man puts some coins on the counter. Matt picks them up and examines them.
Young man: Cheers, mate.
Matt peels a large piece of foil off one of the gold coins. He looks at this chocolate coin intently and then at the young man. He takes a bite to confirm what it is.
Matt: Just as I thought. Chocolate! Look here, Sunshine, I have it on good authority that this is not legal tender. You’ll have to try again, won’t you.
Young man: Woah! You’re obviously pretty sharp aren’t you?!
Matt: Ah well, yer know, I try. Now, come on - its £10.
Young man: Ok, Ok
The young man digs out his wallet and takes out a note of currency and hands it over. Matt holds it up to the light to check its authenticity.
Matt: (Slowly reading off the note) Bank of Toytown.
Matt looks authoritatively at the young man
Matt: That’s better. Now get in.
Young man enters the main area of The Met.
Matt: What do they take me for? Stupid?!
Matt dismissively shakes his head and then picks up a carton of juice from under the counter. He tries to take a swig of drink but keeps knocking the straw out his mouth’s reach. Gram enters, comes behind the counter and Matt puts the carton down.
Gram: You should feel the atmosphere in there, its electric! I’m getting goose bumps on parts of my body that I didn’t even know could get goose bumps. And it feeeeels good! (Smiles) But d’yer know what’s even better than that?
Matt holds up the chocolate money he got from the last customer.
Matt: Free chocolate?
Gram: No, no! It’s much better than that.
Gram takes one of the chocolate coins and unwraps it and starts eating it.
Gram: I got me a date with Jen! (BEAT) Oh and I get to show everyone that I’m a man who can get things done!
Two men come to the counter. One has a notepad and the other has an expensive camera. Matt serves them and Gram hangs their coats up. The men enter the gig area. Gram walks round to the front of the counter and stares towards the doorway to the gig area
Gram: You know who that was don’t you?
Matt shakes his head.
Gram: Only Danny Gimble and Richard Black. The best music journo and photographer from Music Weekly Magazine. I can’t believe they’re here in OUR CLUB!
Matt: (Confused) Are they banned?
Gram smiles walks over to the opposite side of the counter.
Gram: You know what I love about you the most, Matt?
Matt: My illogical thinking?
Gram: Nope, but that does come a close 127th, the one thing I love about you the most is your surname!
Matt: My surname? What, Brewer?
Gram: Yep! Because its guaranteed proof that we aren’t related.
Gram departs for the gig area.