playfull
Friday 1st May 2020 10:52am [Edited]
Nottingham
2,088 posts
Really like all the cast so watched with high hopes, but didn't smile until Stephen Graham got run over. Daniel Mays OTT character doesn't leave any room for anyone else. Can't help feeling if his character were toned down he and everyone else might benefit. That, and a script doctor to up the quality and quantity of gags. For instance -
When Mays dies, his boss says we will name something nice after him like a' canteen or a bird bath'. And the line is lost. It would have worked better if when his boss said "We will name something nice after him like a building or a canteen" Graham said "Just make sure it's not one of those crappy bird baths". Cut to Graham, a year later, shaking his head and muttering, as we pan back to see the bird bath. Same actors, same shots, almost same dialogue, buts makes a much stronger gag.
Will give it another go just for the cast.