War Drama

The sketch is in black and white. A group of WW1 soldiers are crouched in a low trench. Their captain is in front - a large man with a walrus moustache.

CAPTAIN: Right lads. The hun is up there, but here we're perfectly safe, no matter what the swine throw at us.

There is a muffled bang, a slight 'whee' and then a battered wireless radio falls into the trench. The radio begins to play God Save The Queen.

CAPTAIN: No..NO!

The soldiers immediately stand and snap to attention. They are exposed to fire and fall to the ground.

CAPTAIN: You callous bastards. No wonder you're the bad guys.

The captain reaches into a trench, pulls out a large grenade and throws it towards the unseen Germans.

GERMAN VOICE: Ach, gas.

The captain laughs.

CHEERY WIRELESS VOICE: That was God Save The Queen. The weather report now, and we can see that there are strong winds sweeping west..

CAPTAIN: Oh, shit.

I liked that. I thought it should end with the soldiers standing up but then I read the last line. Very good.

It's not a very good whole but it was a way of stringing together two smaller ideas. Thanks for the comment :-)

No i think it is a very good whole. It was just because I was analysing it before I even finish reading it. I wouldn't change it at all. Sorry if I didn't make that clear in my above post

Ah, you did, I was merely engaging myself in a brooding inner monologue. Thankyou muchly!