Hi all,
Finished a new sketch about a vampire, hope you all like it and feedback gratefully received
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mCSTir_Q3Hw
Thanks
Let Me In - Vampire Comedy Sketch
Love the way you've both played this, and the FX at the start are really atmospheric too. I think maybe there's a wee bit too much of it*, and the end fizzles out a bit - perhaps "yeah, there was a problem with the garlic" could have been the punchline, with a withering look as the hero shuts the door..?
Good work overall, though. 
*Default Critique comment #12B
That was very good you've obviously put a lot of effort into a polished product.
Nice to see something looking that good. Really looked like a TV sketch show.
Also a funny script, with character jokes and a good punchline.
Only minor niggles the intro dialogue about Twilight is a bit self conciouse you could lose that.
And yes the garlic reference could go. Also the guy in the house in a little nonchalant about stealing someone else's pizza.
Thanks for the feedback, very useful stuff.
Definitely a learning curve on how long each sketch should be and what is and isn't needed. Actually got rid of an additional 3 minutes of material but I agree it's still a bit long.
I thought it was very well done, good characters and funny content.
Better quality (HD) version here
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1tvUf_mbl48
Alas the jokes are still the same.