Hi guys,
I'm a film student with a love of comedy and we've recently released our first Comedy Short 'Non Smoking Breaks'.
There are a 100 things I wish we'd done differently but I'm proud of the finished product.
Please take a look and let me know what you think.
Comedy shorts are massively underutlised in my opinion and there really is some great stuff online at the moment.
Cheers!
Mark
Hello
Here are my thoughts:
I thought the intro was too long. I think you could set-up that everyone's smoking a lot quicker.
The concept of the sketch (going for a non-smoking break) is fine. Maybe you could have gone further with it - fleshed it out a little more.
When the guys tell the woman she should leave - Er, wasn't that her plan all along? Maybe she should've have replied, "Yeah, that's what I was doing anyway." (or something similar)
Was rather obvious that none of the cigarettes were lit.
The ending didn't seem to be enough. Needs a better punch-line I think.
Good on you for getting together and making this. Hope I don't seem too harsh.