Quote: Jenni @ 10th April 2015, 11:16 AM BST
If I may make an observation not directly related to the humour - your outro is longer than some of your content. As a viewer, I understand why people have the 'subscribe and comment!' bit at the end of videos but it feels like an ad, I don't particularly enjoy it. So when your video is more ad than content it's kind of annoying. Is it possible to shorten that part down? Or alternatively, join several of your jokes into one longer video then your outro won't seem so much like overkill.
I actually quite like these. They're not laugh out loud funny, but they have something about them and I think with some development and perhaps pushing past the initial ideas to find things that are even more surreal/silly you will be onto something. That said, I'm not sure I'd bother checking back to find more of your vids because they are so short. I want more than 20 seconds of entertainment for my efforts.
I think these would be really awesome as a little break/segue between longer sketches or animations. They don't seem like enough to stand on their own but I could imagine them being a quirky thing you come to be known for if they were included in something else.
Thanks Jenni! I will definitely work on the outro, making it much shorter. Seems to be a common complaint. So far, all of these are just old Facebook status updates lol. I will work on some better ones in the future for sure. I just figured it's better to start now, than to wait till it's perfect. Thanks for the advice!
Quote: Bella Sassin @ 12th April 2015, 3:48 PM BST
Hi Stern Laughs,
I like your Strange Conclusions videos the best. I can see how you were inspired by Deep Thoughts. They have a strange and hypnotic quality to them, slightly unnerving. They didn't make me laugh out loud but they did intrigue me. Perhaps you could develop the script a bit more.
I agree with Jenni's comments about your outro being too long and sometimes overshadowing the content of the video. It feels a bit smarmy. I also agree with the comment that these videos could be awesome as a little break between longer sketches or animations. They have a kind of refreshing effect on my brain. After watching one I could be better primed for something fast-paced or punchier. A nice interlude.
Bella
Thanks Bella! Good tips, similar to Jenni above. I agree, I will make a new shorter outro. I'll also come up with new material, as these are just old Facebook status updates I thought were funny I have a strange sense of humour though lol.