gappy
Sunday 25th January 2015 1:03pm
Oxford
2,697 posts
A decent start, I'd say.
The first wasn't bad - apart from a few cheeky words like "rectum" it had the feel of a late 80s R4 sletch show - but I thought the pace could be a little brisker, and I definitely think the punchline was "protect you from the hooves", the last lines felt redundant.
The 2nd I enjoyed a lot more, seemed to suit your voices with the relaxed, contemporary style. Well played and not too long, but could perhaps do with a better ending: the mammary line wasn't enough of a development, and I had no idea what was going on for the last 10 seconds.
So, a good start - the writing isn't flabby, which is the usual fault for early sketches, and you are able to embody diffwerent characters without overdoing the silly voices, which is also a good skill for audio sketches. Let us know when you've done some more : )