Dating a hooker

int. house
see a guy just breking up with his girlfriend as she leave him closing the door

guy is so upset

ext. la strip
guy walks along the la strip

guy (v.o)
(to himself)
maybe I can save one of these girls there out selling there body every night night after night they must want love

comes across a girl who kicked a car door close as the ferarria drives off

guy
(to himself)
now this is a girl that doestn car about money

he walks up to her

guy
(to hooker)
come home with me you will never have to walk the streets again

int. guys lucurias house
she walks in likes wat she sees

guy
you don't have to be a hooker anyomore you can live with me

hooker
okay

3 years later

int. auditorium
they get married, family entire do

int. bedroom
he wakes up

int. stairway
walks down the stairs into living room shes sittig there with her lawyer

guy
so how much do I owe you?

Better than anything else you've offered. Needs extreme levels of smoothening. Seems you have a punchline that could work were the premise stronger.

I agree with Pugsmith. There is a lot of honing needed with this. It has the potential to be a nice ending but you need more work in the middle to lead up to the ending. Maybe various clips of them cuddled up together on the couch, going on holidays together, frolicking in a meadow and then your ending.

Good potential..I think otterfox has a point about more clips of them doing stuff together. but well done.