Cliched unoriginal material, terrible from start to finish.
As mentioned, do far more gigs, learn your material, write a few quality jokes and then post another video.
Good luck!
Please critique my performance Page 2
To be honest, I couldn't take it seriously- the notes were incredibly distracting.
Writing a couple of notes on your hand, you can get away but looking at your notes every 5 seconds (particulary when they're on the floor and takes you a while to read them) is ridiculous- couldn't you have at least memorised a couple of jokes?