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The English language is a beautiful, fascinating yet complicated thing.
Being my third language, I have much to learn so look forward to our grammatical sparring.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ 29th December 2014, 11:12 AM GMTThere is never a need for more than one question mark.
"Does a question mark look like this, '?'?"
"Did you say to Jerf, 'Are you sure about the single question mark thing?'?"
"Who was the lead singer of The Mysterians?"
"Was it ??"
I'm not sure I get this one.
Is the joke that now they're married she's going to kill him? Why did she have to wait for that to be in place? Is he rich or something?
You seem to have a problem finishing sketches very convincingly. Do you start with an ending in mind?
I don't get it.
What I don't really understand (aside from the sketch, sorry!) is that most of your posts outside of the script, seem to be more or less sound when it comes to spelling and grammar? Do you use some kind of spell check for everything aside from the script!? It really is impossible to read, and while I sympathise there are solutions for you out there. Please use them. And forgive me if I'm wrong, but I'm pretty sure you write these off the bat and don't do too much work on them?
I liked some of the opening exchanges in this one for instance, and thought it had a bit of promise - but from the midway point I started getting lost, and I didn't understand the pay off at all I'm afraid. Hone it all, work out what the real nub (hate that word) of the joke is and let it guide the rest. At the moment you have an interesting premise for a sketch but that is all...in my humble opinion that is.
Hope that's not too harsh, you clearly have a wild imagination and that's great. And while I don't advocate people just saying "that's sh*t", which is totally pointless - you should expect that a lack of work your end will result in less valid feedback this end.
Quote: comedywriter dude @ 26th December 2014, 8:21 PM GMTguy at club no girl is paying attnetion to him
hot girl walks up to him puts her drink downhot girl
you gonna poor me a drinklooser guy
i sure will oi bar tender poor this girl a drink on me
The bartender pours some liquor into the guy's lap.
Loser guy: WTF?
Bartender: That'll be ten quid.
Hot girl: Thanks, that was just what I needed.