Pet shop sketch

family walks in to a petshop, the daugher is wondering why
and is against buying a pet

daughter
daddy look at all these pets locked up look at these fish swimming around

pet shop manager walks up and comforts her

pet shop manager
well actually if that ship wasn't in pet shops it would be exctinct

father
did you say you stink?

pet shop mananger
no I said excitint

father
oh but really you do stink

pet shop manager
wellthat's from working in a petshop

father
so there excitnt but uyou save them make you stink but still extinct because they stink?

pet shop manager
well no they don't all stink

sisters brother
this one stinks dadddy

and rattles the birds cage

father
yers hes right that does stink , have you got any animals that arnt excitng and don't stink you think?

pet shop manager
i think this lovely animal doesn't stink isnt extinct

daughter
daddy I see in my book it maqy one day become excint

father
yes my daughter says it may become excitint , and stink , what do you think?

pet shop manager
well if you want a non excitnt animal that won't become excitnt and you don't think will become excint , look at this fish in this aqarium here

father
(to son)
son what do you think , daddy I think this fish tank stinks,
daughter
yes I agree daddy this fish tank stings but I don't think they will come excitint there just fish I mean I thik they wouldnt become excitint

father
yes what do you think do you think this fish that stink , keep my childrend happey of animals that will never become excitint you think?

pet shop manager
well I can never say they will never say they will never beoome exctint but this is the best choice fo you I think

the father dagugher and son nod there heads together

father
i think I'll take this fish and the fish tank that stinks

they take the fish and fish tank and walk out the door

fish manager
good choice I think

So much closer than yor other stuff, but still not funny sorry, but bloody close!

Hey comedy dude how it hingin
Folk on here mighty whinging
Say you tryer there no doubt
If only know what you on about.

You remind me of a young Spike Milligan.

Well done, this is definitely closer than other sketches I've read of yours. There's still a lot of nonsensical replies in the dialogue though, even in the context of the nonsensical world the sketch lives in. Breaking convention is great if the audience understands the rules. If they don't, they're lost. I got lost.

I know you're dyslexic which is tricky, but could you run it through spell check and/or get a friend to help you construct the sentences? This is all about word play, and it doesn't roll off the tongue (brain) if the reader is stopping constantly to check they have the right word/meaning.

W

its very good