Probably gonna regret posting this in here. Of all the sketches we've done we've learned from each one what to do next time.
Britain First parody
I like the premise, I really loved Four Lions and think this is in that vain and a nice other side of the coin. The delivery is not to my taste, I would have preferred something much subtler underlining the characters ignorance and anger slower over an arc.
And I think the gag should have a set up and a conclusion, like a joke where there is suspense built in waiting on the punch line. This is funny but there is no obvious ending other than the guy leaving.
I rewrote it, but judging by the YouTube comments in favour of your version, none of what I'm saying really matters.
Guy sitting is on the phone. Jimmy comes in with a package.
Jimmy
Aright?
Guy
(mouths importantly) I've got them on the phone.
Jimmy
Who?
Guy
India.
Jimmy
But I've got it. (puts down the food)
Guy
Not the Indian, the country; India. While you've been out fraternising with the enemy I'm here on the front line. And you better believe they're starting to take us seriously.
Jimmy
You wanted Jalfrezi.
Guy
I want us all to have Jalfrezi Jimmy but do you think they're going to just hand over the recipes with out a fight?
Jimmy.
NO.
Guy
Right. Take away. They take away, Jimmy. Take away.
Jimmy
(Nods earnestly.)
Guy
(On the phone) You're speaking to the person in charge.
(looks in the package, mouths importantly) Where's the poppadums'?
Jimmy
(Nods earnestly.)
Guy
(Looks annoyed takes out anger on the phone)
No mate you look, I'm making the demands. Our website Briten Ferst is spreading the voice of decent in this country. Our members our growing and our message boards are filling.
I'm putting you and your kind on notice. You have till the end of the day....
(smiles in recognition of something, hangs up.)
Jimmy
What they say?
Guy
Tried to mug me off, tell me it's a router problem. That router's brand new.
Jimmy
Bastards.
Guy
Don't you worry Jimmy, high speed broad band by the end of the day.
(looks at his food) This is shit without poppadums'.
Jimmy
You want me to handle it? Faz in the Indian?
Guy
(holds out thumb, wavering like Caesar, then thumbs down.)
Unlike his facebook page.
Hey thanks a lot for taking your time out to watch and comment!
We kinda wanted to hi-light their ignorance and stupidity! I think we achieved it well!
There's more to come from Pauly and Jimmy I think. 